- Requesting Comments for Process Definition and Presentation

[Gerard Flanagan]

Ilias Lazaridis wrote:

> comp.lang.python / comp.lang.ruby
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> I would like to ask for feedback on the Process Definition and Presentation.
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> Essentially this is exactly what I've myself specialized to do.
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> But I cannot apply the process to my own system.
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> I ask here, as I have criticized those 2 groups publically - and would
> like to give the possibility to reverse the criticism - again publically.
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> Please simply visit
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> http//:lazaridis.com
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> what do you like?
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> what do you dislike?
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> are there points that you do not understand?
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> do you have any suggestions for terminology changes?
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> do you have any other suggestion (marketing, presentation, etc.)?
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> You can use private email, the anonymous contact-form on the website and
>   of course this medium here (c.l.p / c.l.r).
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> Your feedback is _very_ important to me.
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> Greetings!
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Hi Ilias,

I like the overall style of your site - clean layout, good colour
scheme - but there are a number of spelling and grammar errors, (eg.
'diagrams' not 'diagramms', and the past participle of 'feed' is 'fed'
not 'feeded'), which stand out to a native English speaker.

Also, your Usenet posting style is quite terse, almost like bullet
points, and your site reflects this (IMHO).  Flow-charts and bulleted
lists certainly have their place, but they're a bit impersonal - maybe
some more prose would help to present your ideas better?

Having said that, parts of the site maybe have too much information.
The people to whom you want to sell your service probably don't want to
know the implementation details of this service.

"Making IT efficient" is certainly a noble aspiration, I hope you can
make it a profitable one but it'll be a tough market!

All the best

Gerard