[pypy-commit] extradoc extradoc: tweaks

[arigo]

Author: Armin Rigo <arigo at tunes.org>
Branch: extradoc
Changeset: r5399:a008dc94c13f
Date: 2014-09-13 18:15 +0200
http://bitbucket.org/pypy/extradoc/changeset/a008dc94c13f/

Log:	tweaks

diff --git a/talk/pycon2015/stm/submitted.txt b/talk/pycon2015/stm/submitted.txt
--- a/talk/pycon2015/stm/submitted.txt
+++ b/talk/pycon2015/stm/submitted.txt
@@ -47,7 +47,7 @@
 ----------
 
 Attendees will get a quick overview about how PyPy-STM manages to
-remove the GIL.  They will also learn about how this approach actually
+remove the GIL.  They will also learn about how this approach
 enables a new way to use multiple cores in their own applications, and
 how it differs from other solutions (which are generally about running
 independent processes).
@@ -76,8 +76,8 @@
 from a bit earlier.  (This is conceptually similar to transactions in
 databases, but more transparent.)
 
-The typical application that can benefit is doing some computation on
-all objects in some list, but where many of the computations turn out
+The typical application that can benefit is doing some computations
+based on a number of inputs, where many of the computations turn out
 to be independent.  A lot of applications follow this pattern: for
 example, Twisted-based web servers, handling concurrent connections,
 can often answer different requests in an independent way.  This can